Doubt

sammy le fox

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I'm so tired
But I can't sleep
There're still so many secrets
I just keep to myself
And I'm afraid to talk about
Though I know
It would be the best way to speak out

It seems to me
That we are the same kind
And all my friends keep saying
I'm just like you
But I just can't tell you the truth
Though I know
There is nothing for me to lose

Oh I love you
But I'm in doubt
Cos I don't know your feelings
And what you'r ethinking bout me
And I'm far too afraid to ask you
Though I know
It would be the best thing I can do
 

ENachtigall

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Hallo sammy,

darf ich Dir ein paar Vorschläge machen, es zu bearbeiten?

I 'm so tired
but I can 't sleep
there 're still so many secrets
I just keep
to myself
and I 'm afraid
to talk about
though I know
it would be [blue]great[/blue][strike] the best way [/strike]
to speak [blue]it[/blue] out

it seems to me
[strike]That[/strike] we are [strike]the same[/strike] [blue]two of a[/blue] kind
And [strike]all[/strike] my friends keep saying
I 'm just like you
but I [blue]simply[/blue] [strike]just[/strike] can 't
tell you the truth
though I know
there is nothing [strike]for me[/strike] to lose

oh I love you
but I 'm in doubt
cos I don 't know your feelings
and what you 're thinking [blue]a[/blue]bout [strike]me[/strike]
and I 'm far too afraid to ask you
though I know
it would be the best
thing I can do
Gut gesungen wird die Gemeinte sich wünschen, sie wär gemeint.

Viele Grüße

Elke
 

ENachtigall

Mitglied
Ach so, sammy,

...das würde ich glatt einen "Geschlechterdreher" nennen, wenn es nicht so merkwürdig klänge...und für das Gedicht ist es unerheblich. Viel Spaß beim Vertonen und Singen.

Gruß

Elke
 



 
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