Waiter in White (Limerick)

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Bernd

Foren-Redakteur
Teammitglied
New version (after proof reading)

There once was a waiter in white
who was waiting all day and all night
[ 6]until he was old,
[ 6]as a statue - behold -
he was in a desperate plight.
 

Bernd

Foren-Redakteur
Teammitglied
New improved version.

There was a young waiter in white
who was waiting all day and all night,
[ 4] [ 4] and soon it was true:
[ 4] [ 4] he became a statue,
he was in a desperate plight.
 

Bernd

Foren-Redakteur
Teammitglied
Further Improvement

There once was a waiter in white
who was waiting all day and all night,
[ 4][ 4]what I tell you is true:
[ 4][ 4] he became a statue,
he was in a desperate plight.
 

Bernd

Foren-Redakteur
Teammitglied
The version

There once was a waiter in white
who was waiting all day and all night,
[ 4][ 4]what I tell you is true:
[ 4][ 4]he became a statue,
he was in a desperate plight.

got the
"Editors Choice Award
For Outstanding Achievement in Poetry Presented by poetry.com and the International Library of Poetry" .

So it was good to work on it.
You could see the progress of the development of this little poem here.
 



 
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